プレゼント
いつもあげます
うけとない。
present
always give
do not receive.
あまいケーキ
うまくないです
おわりです。
sweet cake
not good
in the end.
だいがくに
ひまなせいかつ
ありません
In college
free life
I do not have.
(^-^*)/ｺﾝﾁｬ! At first, I made this blog solely for my Japanese class, but now I think I'm going to use it outside of Japanese class for my own fun! （ ´∀｀）
2 comments:
Janeeさん、
Very nice job!! I like the tone of your work and the fact that three of them talk about different subjects.
I like your last senryu (and also agree with it), but there is no katakana in it. Maybe you could change the word "hima" into katakana? I think "hima" is more frequently used in katakana than in hiragana anyways...
In terms of the second senryu, it is a bit hard to understand what it wants to say. Maybe you could rearrange the order of words???
がんばって！！
M.N.
I like all of your senryu. Especially the one about the cake - it seems to have a deeper message :)
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